Writing assessment
Finding on the university websites a writing prompt I could take part in, having a fair few experiences in participating in things like these I just had to take up the challenge.
Having a two hundred word limit to express my opinions on the question given to me, this question was a fairly easy one to answer.
"What is the worst aspect of the internet and its various usages?"
Going down the rabbit hole as briefly as I could for this, my answer was the simple-not-so-simple issue surrounding online grooming. Child grooming done online.
Doing this over word as an easy way to make sure I am using the right number of words required as well as needing to publish my answer in a similar format, here is what I got:
Happy enough with what I had to say, I am slightly worried I went a little far but if they wanted my honest opinion then I had no other option but to go far.
According to the webpage, it will take approximately seventy-two hours before I get a response checking over my grammar and perfecting the way I write coming quite handy for my years on this course.
UPDATE
Hearing back from them quicker than I expected, with a response received only an hour or two later.
Critiquing in chapters to focus on different areas, 'Choice of Language':
"Your writing is quite cohesive overall, and you maintain a clear flow of information throughout your work." With this, "signposting language" was the suggested method for improving on my writing skills.
No signs of repetition were used which was a positive note.
Whereas with 'formality of expression', it is expressed that I should have precise and unambiguous language when expressing my ideas with vocabulary that reflects the academic context avoiding generalisations. Also as well, I should aim to create a confident tone within my writing.
'Avoiding colloquial language': Stating I have used an academic tone in my writing overall, there are only minor improvements that can be made.
Spelling and Grammar:
Apostrophes, articles, prepositions, spellings, 'verb tense', 'subject-verb agreements' and appropriate word forms have all been structured without issue.
'Sentence structure' is a different story. It has been reported that some of my sentences are not full and more information is needed to help give my statement clearer with more meaning. All I can say there, is the half sentences that were called out do actually link with the sentence before it. I suppose that just depends on the way you read it. As well with the clearer, the restriction of two-hundred words does make this difficult.
Structure:
A suggestion of using 'PEEL' in my writing was made in support of creating stronger paragraphs.
To improve, my 'paragraph organisation and flow' skills could be improved slightly with that being the last tip made as it was complimented I had clearly addressed the writing prompt with a maintained clear focus throughout.
With that, I am happy with the response given and will work to improve greatly on my writing producing a stronger structure and response.
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